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广告招租，e-mail:yesize@hotmail.com GRE作文每日一评:5.4 Issue 20 "Most of the people we consider heroic today were, in fact, very ordinary people who happened to be in the right place at the right time." I agree with the statement insofar as our heroes tend to be ordinary people like us. However,I strongly disagree with the further assertion that people become heroes simply by being "in the right place at the right time." If we look around at the sorts of people we choose as our heroes, we realize that heroism has far less to do with circumstance than with how a hero responds to it. I concede that heroes are generally ordinary people. In my observation we choose as our heroes people with whom we strongly identify--people who are very much like us. In fact many of us call a parent, grandparent, or older sibling our hero. Why? My intuition is that the more a person shares in common with us----my terms of experience, heritage, disposition, motives, and even physical attributes-----the more accessible that person’s heroic traits are to us, and the stronger their attraction as a role model. And few would dispute that we share more in common with immediately family than with anyone else. 这明显的又是一篇半让步式半反驳式文章。 典型句子结构： I concede that…In my observation…In fact…Why? My intuition is that... 然后用渐强式句子来强调原题观点的正确： The more…the more…, the more… Few would dispute that… 但，在第二段就正式进入反驳并衍生观点了：However, the statement’s further suggestion that…is simply wrongheaded. However, the statement’s further suggestion that people become heroes merely as a result of circumstances not of their own choosing is simply wrongheaded. Admittedly, circumstance often serves as a catalyst for heroism. After all, without wars there would be no war heroes. Yet this does not mean that we should lionize (把……视作名人)every member of the armed forces. I find quite telling the oft-used idiom "heroic effort," which suggests that mere coincidence has little to do with heroism. If one examines the sorts of people we select as our heroes, it becomes evident that heroism requires great effort, and that the very nub(=key point) of heroism lies in the response, not in the circumstance. 精华：If one examines…it becomes evident that…the very nub of…lies in…not in… Consider the ordinary person who overcomes a personal obstacle through extraordinary effort, fortitude, or faith---thereby inspiring others toward similar accomplishments. Sports heroes often fall//into//this category. For example, Lance Armstrong, a Tour de France cycling champion, became a national hero not merely because he won the race but because&nb......
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